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Re: Introduction: Shinobu Mendoza
Hello Santana, I've read your introduction and I find the idea very interesting and I think it could develope into a very interesting story. I do have some objections, more ...
Sep 24, 2013 -
Re: My Story Bio
Hello Catnip, I'm here to give you my opinion and I hope that you won't mind me being a little more critical that my previous fellow reviewers. First I must ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: The Venom
You story is very well written and extremely powerful when it comes to transmitting feelings. You managed to convert here terror and her remorse in such a way that it ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: Dance of the Lone Spirit (alternate ending)
Hello SushiSashima, I must say that I love your story, mostly because I am a fan of the gender myself. You really have a natural talent at creating mystery. I ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: Maria Rosalee's Curse Part 1
Hello Anmarie, one review from me. As Tabithalillian focused a lot on the storytelling I'm not going to do the same and instead talk about the characters. But first I ...
May 26, 2013 -
Re: The Only One- Chapter Four
I think this is a nice ending although again it could be developed a bit more. Nate's reaction is predictable and that is good because it adds to the realism. ...
May 20, 2013 -
Re: The Only One-Chapter Three
This is the part that I like most because Nate gets what he deserves at last. Again be careful that there are some linked words. However there are some problems ...
May 20, 2013 -
Re: The Only One- Chapter Two
Now to part two, In the first paragraph, just at the end of the first sentence, I think it comes "guess by whom". Also, Andy is destroying a bit his ...
May 20, 2013 -
Re: The Only One
Hello winterbites, I had read all the chapters of you story and now I will try to say something about each one of them. I like the way Andy introduces ...
May 20, 2013 -
Re: The Whisper
Hello unitiger14, First of all welcome to YWS. I hope you will have a great time here. So here is my review, I hope it will help you. A general ...
May 18, 2013 -
Re: Room 53
Hello Natural Militia, First I want to say that managed to write a great story, a very disturbing one but otherwise great. I appreciate the main idea you chose for ...
May 18, 2013
