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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Only the Strong Survive (ch. 1- Angelo)

    Renn, I really enjoyed this first chapter! Your descriptions are well written and your characters are deeply drawn. And even though there are many similarities to X-Men, you give the ...

    Apr 11, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Only The Strong Survive- Interlude One

    Renn, I was really intrigued by your interlude. Though I didn’t totally comprehend everything that was going on, that’s actually what made it all the more intriguing. I love stories ...

    Apr 5, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: The Rage (Very rough, rough draft) Prologue

    SP, you’re prologue is a good one. Without being too wordy, your descriptions are very detailed. You not only describe the Rage, but you make readers feel the Rage. Therefore, ...

    Mar 28, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: The Forgotten (working title)

    Redbird, your novel is fantastic! And I’m not just talking about the plot, either. Your writing is nearly flawless. Your prose is clear and crisp, and instead of being overly ...

    Jan 11, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Silhouettes - Chapter 1

    Seshat, your premise is interesting. I’m curious to know where these creatures known as Silhouettes come from, what their intentions are, and, namely, why they’re targeting the main protagonist. W

    Jan 8, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Great Test of Faith -- Chapter Two

    RachelJY, I really enjoyed your second chapter. It’s filled with Scriptural accuracy; yet, with your charming imagination, you bring the events to life in a real, personable way. We see ...

    Jan 4, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Great Test of Faith -- Chapter One

    RachelJY, your opening narrative was powerful! It was written with the depth and authority that we see in the actual Scriptures. And it relates perfectly, in a gripping, soul-stirring way, ...

    Jan 4, 2012
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Taint of Red(2).Chapter One

    Forestqueen, having read your entire novel – not sure if you saw the review I posted – I think your alternate first chapter isn’t a bad idea. It tells of ...

    Jan 2, 2012


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