Jiggity

Edited. Someone suggested italicising her dialogue. Does it help? Does it work?

Hey hey Ky, You're absolutely right about the first chapter. This is as slow it gets I think, for the next couple chapters it's going to be even more disorientating. ...

Thanks so much for everything Smaur, your comments were awesome. Revised. ^^ [title change = good?]

Hey, This is the first chapter of a novel. The tense change toward the end of the piece is intentional, between dream and reality, the ones before then were not ...

As helpful as ever, Blink! I did play with tense quite a bit; changed from past to present to past again, so yeah I did slip up a few times ...

Ah, what I was wondering in regards to the violin is, were they used in gulags or concentration camps? Is that something I'm unaware of, but actually did happen? Historically ...

Thanks peeps, for the commenting and such. It's been revised a bit, with a title change (gasp!) and more to come. I don't quite know if its worth the effort ...

# 9 – Detective Aaron ~as ever, somewhat rushed out, apologies for dip in quality. just getting desperate to get the story out now ~ Aaron struggled to rein in ...

XD. I always value your input, Angel! (Don't tell the others, but I sorta enjoy it more than the mean ones :p) I don't think its horrible, and I like ...

More romantic, eh? You like the really horrible stuff and the really girly stuff at the same time? How is it that I'm ever able to please you? xD I ...

Oh, responses without my prompting them? This is nice. ^_^ Thanks for your comments both of you. It does need some editing, I reckon. The stuttering was purposeful because it ...

Okay, so I'm semi-late for my lecture as it is so I have to leave this at one line: I think I love you :shock: Seriously, that was awesome. Thanks ...

Hey! The picture prompt was number 8, the guy holding the egg-beater to his head. I think I may have been a bit too ambiguous lol. I mean, to be ...

Cheers, Blink! Glad at least someone read this. Much appreciated. Really. :wink: Thanks again, ~ SJ

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