Jiggity

Heh, yes Snoink. This is the first short story I've written in a while. And the ending has changed three times already. First, I ended it where James first breaks ...

DEMSEH! You made me a sad panda by taking so long and now you've made me even sadder! Dialogue is...well, everything. And it's only been praised thus far, so, it's ...

Yayness! Snoink, I deliberately made it non-linear so I could slot it in wherever I want, because I have the nagging feeling of incompleteness with the first three chapters and ...

No worries, I get that too. I wasn't just referring to time - if the protagonist's viewpoint is disjointed, it's going to affect everything, not just time. But that's why ...

Ooookay. First off - you're awesome. Just to start off and thanks very much for the effort! :P So, yes, he wakes up clear-headed. As though the slate has been ...

I despise the normal school scene too, the first half of this chapter needs to be changed I agree. I didn't think of him as depressed though -- he snapped, ...

Gorram that chapter two and it's boring school scenes! >.< How do I make that interesting if, well, I'm not interested? Hm. I think it needs to be destroyed. I ...

Hm. Okay. Cool, well he's certainly the most interesting character thus far, it'll be interested to see him grow. I know about the frustration! I'm having the same thing with ...

Yes, his behaviour definitely struck me as odd. So, I'm glad that *I* wasn't imagining that haha. Now, onwards and upwards, eh? The freak gasped. The walls were covered in ...

So, I had my monthly meeting with my project supervisor aaand...She liked it. I was really surprised. I went in there with my proverbial hat in hand, ready for a ...

Thanks, Snoink. I just came by to look at this and it was all horribly formatted! Was it like that before? It had no spaces or anything. You should have ...

Hm. You're right, I think. At least, I'm not sure - mostly because of the dancing piggy! It keeps distracting me! >.< Haha, yes I think this is way too ...

Argh, I am having so much trouble with this. Third chapter is killing me >.< I've written it several times now, each in which something different occurs. The reason I ...

Thanks Lily, I just updated this - it's the most revised edition now. Cheers

Haha, no, no, it's all good. Discussion is important. The only thing that's stopping me is that I've essentially had four people comment on this (on YWS and off) and ...