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I'm back, as requested! You mentioned I needn't provide a review, just a general indication of improvement or not, but I figured while I'm here, I might as well add ...

Hey there Kafka, Didn't really know what to make of this, as is, it's a loose collection of moments that don't really tie into each to become anything else, anything ...

Hey there, Kira, This wasn't too bad, I have to say. You've got a fairly decent sense of pacing, a good mixture of characterisation and action, without info-dumping the hell ...

Stunning. Beck, that you haven't written in so long is an absolute crime against humanity. Next time you question whether or not to write something, or if in fact you ...

Hey Gryph! *waves* I saw this in my newsfeed and thought I should come and take a look. I'm glad I did, it's really quite good and interesting too. I ...

Just generally general comments, huh? ~_- Well, I enjoyed the simplicity of it, first and foremost. Nice, short and broad strokes. Quite clean. That said, you have to change her ...

Hey Jack, Glad to see you're producing again, man, gives me hope I can get back on the bandwagon too. First and foremost, I have to say this depressed me. ...

Hey Kyllorac, I do love me a good fable, and this had the style but the content was a bit...off at stages. fifty were of Moon Mother, giving unto being ...

Evi! *snugs* Okay, two things first -- one, this is my first review in forever and can I just say what a marvellous re-introduction to YWS fiction this is! Thank ...

Hey Conrad, Good to see you're writing again, or at least posting again, anyway. First off, the opening two lines are fantastic. Sadly, they outshine the rest of the piece ...

First and foremost, Dhanadad is the most ridiculous name ever. Totally tripped me up. In more ways than one. It was the man’s gesture that alerted Dhananad’s eye to the ...

Hey there, So, I actually kind of enjoyed this! Heh, it's surprising to me because the Fantasy section here is usually populated by younger members who care more about the ...

Areida! *glompage* So, I'm with Mesh here. You do have a bit of an overabundance of commas. some unnecessary, some misplaced, but this is mostly really solid writing and it ...

Hey there, Don't think I've noticed you around before, so, welcome! You've got a nice piece here, solidly written, but you could tighten it up a bit more. Initially, I ...

Hola, Kylan. I have come, as requested - like Bitter, I don't do this very often haha. I've been incredibly busy of late, so if this is short, I apologise! ...