Jiggity

Hey hey Ky, You're absolutely right about the first chapter. This is as slow it gets I think, for the next couple chapters it's going to be even more disorientating. ...

Thanks so much for everything Smaur, your comments were awesome. Revised. ^^ [title change = good?]

Hey, This is the first chapter of a novel. The tense change toward the end of the piece is intentional, between dream and reality, the ones before then were not ...

As helpful as ever, Blink! I did play with tense quite a bit; changed from past to present to past again, so yeah I did slip up a few times ...

Still alive and active?

Dude, my stawry is lonely without your company. Shadow of the Sun (S.O.S)

Ah, what I was wondering in regards to the violin is, were they used in gulags or concentration camps? Is that something I'm unaware of, but actually did happen? Historically ...

Hey there, My father has a gun. A Luger, he calls it. It's very beautiful. Silver and black. He's a policeman, he says, and a guard. He carries the gun ...

Mikhail was trapped. He’d come to a dead end. Breathing harshly, he turned around, placing his back flat against the wall. His dark, sweat-plastered hair squished against the cold grey ...

feel all lazy and guilty not getting up, but [s]I[/s] every time I try Cut the first I “It was an accident, man.” Something about this line irked me. It ...

Thanks peeps, for the commenting and such. It's been revised a bit, with a title change (gasp!) and more to come. I don't quite know if its worth the effort ...

Hello, dear Sammy-Sam. Just a few typo's I'd like to point out. would be about the same age has his old sister. as Today, would take the bus into the ...

# 9 – Detective Aaron ~as ever, somewhat rushed out, apologies for dip in quality. just getting desperate to get the story out now ~ Aaron struggled to rein in ...

Yeah, YWS is good as a crucible for crap. I've felt the burn often enough :p Sounds awesome, Jack, cheers for the link. Haven't checked it yet but definitely will. ...

XD. I always value your input, Angel! (Don't tell the others, but I sorta enjoy it more than the mean ones :p) I don't think its horrible, and I like ...