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Hey there, Ky. Been a while, eh? His jaw was slung open slightly because it was so hot and [s]so[/s] his tongue was tacky as candy. No need for the ...

I'm not usually harsh. I don't think so anyway, but I just went through the records to find the last critique I did - it was a while ago, I'm ...

I don't know any of those authors but they depress me.

I just went to check up on it, as I like to do occasionally and it said Authorization Required? Wouldn't let me get to the page...appears to be down?

Edited. Someone suggested italicising her dialogue. Does it help? Does it work?

Could equally be teen angst or strange horror. Shadow of the Sun

Snap. That's a great opening, doesn't really constitute a paragraph though does it? Still, lovely hook. My own keeps changing. Keep working on it. -- The sun died. No one ...

Cool. Any chance for a radio show sometime before then? It's been a while. And! There's the chance of hearing Kitty, Jack and I all at once! Surely worth a ...

3/10 - only know Secondhand Serenade. 1. In Every Sunflower - BellX1 2. When Nobody Knows - Kings of Leon 3. Talkin' Bout A Revolution - Tracy Chapman 4. The ...

Hm. I remember reading heaps on this but for the life of me can't remember any of it right now. It's too early, I guess. Check out Aside from being ...

Welcome. Glad to see you've come with the active aim of improving. PM me if you need anything. Cheers

Hey hey, Welcome to YWS. Before I begin, I think I should say that here we have a policy that for every story or poem you post, you should review ...

lol. 7.5/10

6.5/10 - panic rule. 1. Dream catch me - Newton Faulkner 2. Black Sheep Boy - Okkervil River 3. Almost Lover - A Fine Frenzy 4. Songbird - Bernard Fanning ...

7/10. Lol.