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So, I initially wasn't sure about the role of the 'dark boy' because his inclusion was completely random. I was thinking of creating many manifestations of the devil in the ...

Hey there, Your speech tagging really needs work. You need to separate dialogue from action as well. "Stupid rapist," I mumbled, grabbing the head by the blood soaked curls on ...

Hey y'all, Thanks very much for the comments :p. I've temporarily struck the last line, will review it later. Not really sure how or if this will be relevant but ...

Not actually sure whether this will be pertinent to the main story. Still exploring the concept. Way Down in the Hole They stared down into the hole. It was huge, ...

We were reduced into nothing more than airy globes that barely twinkle while the earth below is washed in darkness. We were reduced to nothing more than airy globes that ...

Hey there, Ky Risky choice, putting this here. Tis mostly a graveyard, after all. Just one or two things I thought I'd point out. the same woods were I saw ...

Sweetness! Also, and it may just be that I'm noticing this now but it's been around for a while, or whatever, but the little strip of info at the top ...

Huh. I totally forgot this thing existed...and I don't really remember Black Jade at all, though I remember the series...I think I'll take my own advice and go back and ...

The actual (sub)genre is called science fantasy. And thus, it is neither.

Hmm. You tread a fine line between cop-out and greatness, haha. I think it's a really good short story, all told - probably your best, honestly. I really enjoyed it. ...

Dear Sur, I will never forgive you if someone doesn't get raped at the end of this. That is all. p.s I'm really enjoying this and no, this isn't a ...

Haha, I don't consider that an argument, I consider it a discussion. ^^ If you raise an issue, I'd like you to see that I am at least considering and ...

Hey Sur, This is really good stuff, basic, simple exposition well executed. My only comment, really, is that all ginger-related comments within were hilarious and in effect, the highlight of ...

Heya, June, Thanks for your comment. I don't really agree with though, haha. First off - this is a piece of mine, right? xD It should just be a given ...

Just a fun little way to pass the time -- I've decided to create a flash fiction serial! Small doses of these two, among others, xD. Since it is a ...