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~Thorontur~ Darkness was creeping in, shrouding the forest in shadows; making once friendly sounds seem sinister, once friendly eyes become predatory and gradually undermining Thorontur's confidence.

Thanks a lot fishr, I'll get to fixing those errors. Also, with the jaw-snapping part; if you went to take a large bite out of something and missed, wouldnt your ...

Shadow is the main character, yes, but we will see things from the child's perspective as well. Im not sure how much more I'll be able to write, as school ...

Inow have a custom rank!!! YAAAAAAAAAAAy!! I know this thread is, all dead and everything but I wanted to say something here, so;^ 7/10.

no, no can do. TPBM goes hyper when given sugar. (now im a novelist, coool)

Small grammatic errors, I shall point out. I’ve heard you like this place? Why freak?’ Why, Freak? The boy looked to the floor of the car as it spend down ...

His muscles werent straining, they were 'pumping', it was his veins that were straining against his skin. I put that in just for imagery, so you could see Shadow more ...

He could smell the fear on the child, from his vantage point on the roof, as it walked down the alley. It was a heady smell...full of promise; the promise ...

Could you make your character a full vampire who was once an elf? That would make more sense. Thoruntor stood, poised for violence in the shadow of a great oak; ...

The sound of another scream ripped through layers of pain-induced unconcioussness to bring him, gasping, back into the waking world. Hearing footsteps approach the door, his scrambled frantically to h

Thanks alot man. Ive been getting some real positive comments about this story so I'll definetly write more.

Yeah sure, whatever. TPBM is Mr.Smithers from Simpsons (come now, fess up)

Yeah its refreshing stinky. Lol. seriously though I dont. TPBM is a vampire!

Okay, I like this storybook idea, its (to me at least) very fun. Unfortunately some of them are way too far in for me to join, so I'm going to ...

What makes you think its any one of those you thought of. Im not that I??