Jiggity

I'll agree with everything said. Also, dont use brackets to impart anything in any story. Okay, fit it into the story if you must. Otherwise dont do it. There were ...

This was good, very good. One prob. Which was good, seeing as how he only had one living relative left Take out the 'how' in this sentence. It's unnecessary, drags ...

Awesome. Thanks for taking the time to critique this. A lot of what you said made sense and I'll set about fixing, altering or rephrasing those sentences. The introduction...I can ...

Uh, I dont really get it. But I'll give it a 6 anyway. Just incase its funny.

Due to the overwhelming lack of interest from the majority, I will change this from an RPG to a story book that follows Shakyra's story. I'll come back and add ...

Thanks a lot. Comments are much appreciated. And Im sure you'll do better as you get older.

This was well written, thats for sure. A couple of things though: is this ment to take off from where the book left it?, because if so there are some ...

Introductory Notice. The following account is perhaps a tad unbelievable. I wished to leave a transcript of the letters, and journal entires I kept so as to verify the truthfulness ...

Monument by Ian something or other.

Thanks, Fishr. Comments ar much appreciated, but going by the lack of them I'd say a lot of people havent seen Unbreakable, so your not alone there... Its tuesday...

Thanks a lot Crysi, I cant help but notice though, that a couple of the quotes you used had already been edited. I updated not long ago, lol. Thanks for ...

whoa, thanks a lot tim, such messages are exactly what I need. I'll go about fixing it up once more. Cheers, ~Jiggy

There is a place. In this place a battle for supremacy between Man and Monster goes on unnoticed, unabated. Darkness crawled over the twinkling city, overcast by a turbulent mass ...

Has noone anything to say? Nothing constructive? Not even a simple 'I liked it, it was good'?

fanfic of Unbreakable ************ Institute for the Criminally Insane Elijah Price stared dazedly into the distance. He was allowed one small window, through which to see the outside world, and ...