Jiggity

mmhmm, Im reading your story as we speak. I think its awesome that you've posted a story so soon after joining. Welcome to YWS, k3pt. I love your avatar, btw.

Lol, thanks. Its always good to hear such things. Comments are appreciated, so thanks again.

That is the question I find myself asking. Why write? Why do we write? What makes us want to spin these tales? Do we, just naturally want to entertain? I ...

Well Im going to give Misty here a great big clap, as that was just fantastic, nicely done. I agree, completely, which is I know, lazy of me, but hey. ...

funnae! Thats what this story is. Quite enjoyable really, but Im confused, shold this be treated as an actual story, or is it just something enjoyable to write and read? ...

On a busy commercial street there was a shop. It was tucked away between larger buildings, secluded and dark. Out of the flow of commuters, stepped a tall man in ...

Just quickly because I have to go: "Is this a heaven," take out the 'a'. I promise, I'll come back and give it a good go-over.

Im afraid that isnt a story. Its like I dont know, the opening part of the first chapter. Anyone the first line repetition of 'like' stood out and by that ...

Thanks man. Um, Im going to leave it as it is for now, let it fade into obscurity until the fullstory emerges in my head. I just wanted to write ...

Thanks a lot fishr! The dialogue part is kinda explained by the Type 1 Osteogenesis Imperfecta: Its a rare disease, that makes the bones especially brittle. For instance were Mr. ...

Fantastic. Emotion was wonderfully expressed. Spaces would create a bigger impact though, use them, theyre quite effective. Al-Hamdulelah. Im so glad that this was written. Its nice to know there ...

I really enjoyed this. Surprisingly enough, its not about griffins, although undoubtedly they'll make an appearance. And I have never wanted to be apart of the non-existent SPEW, as much ...

Ok, I believe in human rights and I certainly think that what happened was atrocious, especially as Christianity and Judaism are partially accepted in Islam. However, I do not think ...

I didnt read the second part, but as to the first: Get rid of the brackets. Okay? They must be gone. They serve no purpose. Overall I liked and enjoyed ...

Thats okay, thanks for taking the time to review this. I'll revise chapter three then put in the next chapter. Coming soon!!