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Homework...the bane our existence. It interferes with TV and I dont like that. If you learn about your subjects through homework then your teacher(s) is/arent very good and your school ...

Dirk Stone carefully sheathed his blade, as it became apparent that the knights meant them no harm. They rode up slowly now, wary of the armed and very dangerous barbarian. ...

Vera peered intently into the crystal globe, watching as Dynamo strode away from the pit, presumably on the trail of Maxwell Hammer. She couldn’t have him come across Maxwell too ...

Awesome, thanks for your comments. I'll get to fixing those errors. As for the BMW/Bus thing, yes there are reasons for its existence, the primary one being that he is ...

Lol. This was just hilarious. DQ was very nicely captured, I think, as a character. Bravo, Griffy, Bravo indeed.

I think it lies with me in this instance. My post, which will allow this to take off once more will come tomorrow. After my post tomorrow, there will be ...

Okay, that was a bit harsh, only because I forgot to ention the good qualities of the story. You have great description, a if not unique, then is definetly a ...

Rashtara’s fiery eyes glared at the chaos that ravaged below her small stone cottage that was built beside a large yawning cave entrance that led to the upper levels of ...

Consider the fact that the "child" isnt actually a child but something else entirely. Tha would apply in the case of a normal little boy/girl but not in this instance. ...

Jane Eyre is a literary classic, which encapsulates the struggle of the modern female, or indeed that of all females. Its a text full of textual integrity because it relates ...

is for the endless money all writers make. Are you under the delusion, that we writers are a wealthy bunch? Perhaps, if your a truly successful writer/author, you may make ...

Okay, so in general, Id just like to say that dialogue looks a lot better if its spaced out. There were a few spelling errors but a part from that ...

Well so far it seems okay. Ive got no idea about the description in regards to the alien species' or the accuracy of anything because Im not a SW fan. ...

I dont even know anymore. I'll see what happens, it could change. I agree with bubblewrapped about the menacing aspect of the original...but Im not concrete on this...*sigh*, it could ...

Thanks again for looking at this and taking the time to critique it. Its much appreciated and always will be. The fourth chapter will soon follow.