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To me Take this out of the two stanza;s it appears in. It does nothing but halt the flow of the poem. Overall, this is really good, I quite enjoyed ...

Nonsense. Ive read prologues equally as long. Well, true to form, you've written exceptionally well, which is kinda grating but hey, your talented and good for you. So, anyway: I ...

I think I should actually read LATENT HERITAGE. There is somewhat of a hype about it and I've seen for myself that your an excellent it should be worth the ...

Yes you should check into it, and so should everyone else, its an awesome movie. Seriously, its ridiculously good and coming from the M.Night.Shyamalan Im not surprised, as he is ...

Okay, maybe its just me but the quality of fanfiction seems to be increasing...or maybe its only apparent here on this site. Anyways, this was very well written, bravo! Despite ...

Wow. This is, I think, exceptionally good, especially for a Harry Potter fanfic. There are millions of them and there all crap, bar a few, and this is one of ...

This is really well written and in fact I hesitate to say anything because I believe this would benefit from an in-depth critique which I just cant manage right now, ...

Well arent we all quick off the mark. Hey Val, are you a writer or poet or alien or mixture of all three? Whats you favourite form of writing, I ...

Yeah, I agree with Dammer, this is really good with a few minor things needing some light editing. Brinda stared down at her muddle reflection muddled. You do this a ...

Nothing puts me off more then unbroken text. Seriously, I look at it then just turn away, regardless of the quality of writing. Use paragraphs and spacing please, and I'll ...

This is really well done. I liked the idea that gems are used as currency, at least thats the impression I got. I disagree with Firestarter though, in regards to ...

Yeah I kinda noticed that, lol. I'll change it. As to the story, that sounds fine, of course it may turn out different but we'll just have to wait and ...

Just quickly: This seems rather flat. Im not quite sure how to explain it, I think it has to do with the whole Showing vs Telling majiggy. The way it ...

Vera sighed contentedly. She was happy. Chaos was spreading throughout the land and her Masters were happy for this, rewarding her with more power. As the dead and dying increased ...

This is really good. I must say though, that it seems quite stupid to write this with no intention of continuing or explaining of the circumstances in which it is ...