Jiggity

Okay. This is very well written, exceedingly so in fact. There are a cople of stupid mistakes, as you've already pointed out. The length of this is kinda daunting, but ...

Thanks a lot, all. I appreciate your comments, they are always welcome.

That made no sense whatsoever to me. Just say 'I do/nt like it' next time, sheesh.

Weird. Very weird. And random. Grammatically speaking this is excellent, a great piece of writing. But it's strange, it opens with a sadistic man taking pleasure in someone else's pain ...

If the poet is "away from...the wants of society" what is s/he yearning to be free from? first off, thanks for the comment Bubbles, I'll look into and tweak some ...

High praise, from both of you, for which I thank you. Bein a tentative writer of poetry--this is after all, only my second poem--this encouragement is very helpful and very ...

That was obscure and...disjointed. Oh yeah, and really confusing. Not much to say other then that, and, how is it related to the title? Anyway, Only through persistence shall we ...

My second poem ******** After months of uncertainty I run and hide, away from the accusations, the expectations, into the comforting dark. Enmeshed in velvet night, cocooned in a net ...

Ah, amusing is the only that comes to mind here, and my my you are unning out of ideas, arent you griffy. Still, it was funny and thats your purpose ...

Okay, first off. You use too many words in sentences, they are overly long. This story, which is dragged down by those over-long sentences, would benefit from them being chopped ...

Thats a big accolade which I probably dont deserve but I thank you nonetheless. Its much appreciated. Cheers.

Whilst I prefer the first 2 comments, I do appreciate yours, thank you. I'll try and do as you said and we shall see what emerges. The façade is crumbling, ...

Wow, this was surprisingly good. I couldnt find any errors, which disturbs me more then you could possibly know. Hmm...there was one thing, actually: 'm hoping the breeze in my ...

Thank you. This is just something I felt needed to be expressed. It is infact entirely true. But again, thank you for your comments.

Lol, that was the idea. And the main character(s) hasnt been introduced yet. That was the prologue. Other people featuring, so far, in this epic battle for the world: fishr ...