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Re: With No Chances
It grows, thick and spindly and not quite lush. It feeds, its depth casting planes and angles into sharp relief, depressions become gaping craters; I am haunted in its shadow. ...
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: a fall into beauty - by angel
Angel! YAY! You've returned!
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 3
Gorram that chapter two and it's boring school scenes! >.< How do I make that interesting if, well, I'm not interested? Hm. I think it needs to be destroyed. I ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
Hm. Okay. Cool, well he's certainly the most interesting character thus far, it'll be interested to see him grow. I know about the frustration! I'm having the same thing with ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
Yes, his behaviour definitely struck me as odd. So, I'm glad that *I* wasn't imagining that haha. Now, onwards and upwards, eh? The freak gasped. The walls were covered in ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 3
So, I had my monthly meeting with my project supervisor aaand...She liked it. I was really surprised. I went in there with my proverbial hat in hand, ready for a ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: Maharaj the Magician - 2 [edited]
Thanks, Snoink. I just came by to look at this and it was all horribly formatted! Was it like that before? It had no spaces or anything. You should have ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
Modern spaces confine, walls close in, a messy whorl of confused utterances, looped and spun in a dozen different colours blurred into the same murky black. No place to raise ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
You duck your head with a playful smile, a quick flash of white, gone. And I want to cup your chin, lift it up - don't hide that fitful candle; ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
Okay, I rewrote one of my earlier crappy poems. It's still a touch simple and obvious, but not as much as before and thus the crappiness is a little less, ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: Navita's NaPo Poems
Fighting Form - really, really enjoyed that. Nice and intimate and soft, very nice stuff. The only thing I would mention is, find another way to say the dog-eared corners ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
(Eek, I'm two behind!) ** Lying down in ruffled bedsheets, tossed by invisible storms, thoughts refusing to die, a persistant insistent buzz, buzz against the dark. You edge toward the ...
Apr 17, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
Hola! I have to be quick, I'm in a rush, but overall this is much improved! She almost fell , b ut she had to keep moving. She had to ...
Apr 16, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
Um yeah, wow. That's pretty much exactly it, I was trying to mix it up a bit. And it was never meant to be prose! I'm sorry! Stupid phone lead ...
Apr 15, 2010 -
Re: With No Chances
Wow, I didn't know my phone failed completely to format these >.< But, ah, they're sorta viewable now.
Apr 14, 2010
