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Hey, Ye, I agree with Logic on this one. Nice looking picture, but for me there is no focus point, and so my yes just drift over it. The angle ...

Hi everyone! Well, I joined YWS about... five months ago I think, but I had too many commitments to think about writing. Stupid, I know. :-) Anyhow, I thought I ...

Hi Cade! Nice to meet you! Anyway, on to the crit: General So, you are basically putting one idea per verse? I like it! Great originality here. I have a ...

Algae are people too! Erm... what?

Until = [s]un[/s]til = 'til I rarely use them though, but when I do, 'til FTW! :D

Ye, hehe. I personally loathe the books, they're like reading from a bin... until I come up with something more constructive to say :-)

All his strength let him do was object with frightened head turns. that makes perfect sense. especially in context...

people dont write in diaries every day, not to mention more than once a day...

thanks for comments. the fact that you didnt know where he was from was intentional, but if you dont like that i can change it. he was going to be ...

OK, this book is not really action or adventure yet, and will not be for the first half. The second half, which will be in thrid person following someone else ...

Wow Mark! this is considerably better than your first drafts. They were somewhat reminisscent of your latin homework... This is much better. Still no idea what the plot's supposed to ...

I don't care what other people say, I think this is really good. It doesn't really fit under the category of historic though, if you are planning on do what ...