JessicaB

WOWOWOWOW!!! Amazing. PM whens theres more.

Really descriptive! I like that a lot.

I agree with the other reviewers about the corrections. It seems like a really interesting story. My prediction: The blue pendant has significant meaning! I'm excited for more. PM me ...

That is really deep. I like it a lot. It gives a lot of insight into the world we are forced to live in right now. I like this a ...

As promised, I went through this chapter as well. I didn't look at the other reviews, so sorry for any repeats, but I think you would have edited it, so ...

I really really like this it's intense. I think you should take that story line and turn it into a long story or book. Write the transformation of your MC. ...

Hey guys! This is going to be a short story! For my english class. I'll add more later, for now, this is part one. No title yet! **************************************************** Oh, how ...

Okay you let me know you had a cool story you were working on, so I had to check it out. I found some errors. I didnt look through the ...

Okay guys, here's chapter 2. Trust me I know it is full of mistakes, help me get them out and make it better. Thanks so much! Hope you enjoy, if ...

I need this reviewed because it is a contest entry at my school and i dont trust my teacher :D Anne lifted the last box marked dishes/ utensils out from ...

Prologue: I seesawed through unconsciousness. My dreams were only the sharp daggers of pain and the erratic breathing coming through my lungs. The darkness in my head enveloped me again, ...

Okay, I've read through this, and there are a couple mistakes I will point out but the big thing I notice is, it seems you are rushing through the story. ...

Chapter Two “We don’t know till I complete the Change.” I said, grabbing a pillow from bed. I dont mean to be a pest, LOL, but the chapter doesn't really ...

The writing is good, but you need more detail or the readers are going to get lost while reading. I noticed something big, you put in parenthesizes (I say screeched ...

Creative...yeah, but in my opinion you kind twisted the characters in a way that they just shouldn't be twisted. I am a fan of the Twilight series but this just ...