Jenthura

Wow. That was amazing. I'm sorry about putting up yet another one of those, 'I have no review or critique here but I'm gonna say ZOMG about your writing anyways ...

Aiyee, sorry about that. I meant to put it into the short stories. Big mistake, sorry. I'll see if I can ask someone to move it...

Good, let's start. I suggest we put up a DT for this SB.

Wow, a massive block of text. It makes the story hard to read, and can often intimidate the reader. Try separating the paragraphs with another space, or even separating every ...

Hey Donny, first off, welcome to YWS. Secondly...good work here, but frankly, it's too long. Try cutting it up into chapters, or parts. You'll intimidate your reader with all that ...

A pen can tell a story in many ways. No, I don’t mean it in the way you think. It is not through the pen that this story is told: ...

Name: Corry Haydes Age: 13 Height: 5' 2'' Conventional Weapons: A headband to amplify and focus brainwaves. Corry can still control his power without the band, but it requires far ...

Well, I'm not sure what an Owl City is, and the joke was...how can I not be harsh about this? Well, it was me. Sorry, 7/10

7/10 Sorry, but the link was a Youtube vid I didn't really...like? What's a wonka anyhow? Also, the lines (of poetry? lyrics?) rhyme, but they're separated by that link. It ...

Fortunately, it was just a rat.

Hey! I just want you to know the date was very distracting. I know you mentioned it, and that you're trying to fix it, but here's something you can do ...

I really like the one you titled 'water' for several reason. One, you managed to apply shading in such a way that the creature really looks alive, wet and disgusting. ...

You know what? You should try your hand at painting or drawing. If your mom is this good, it must be in your genes, lol. Anyways, very nice, a little ...

Granted, but then by whose definition do you judge 'good music'? It turns out to be Country. (That's not really a corrupt wish for those who like Country, but what ...

Yes! Finally another FF Fan on YWS! I almost gave up all hope! :D But first, I must reply to BenFranks for his detailed review. (He was kinda first in ...