Jenthura

Amazing! I love that little "What is freedom?" in the center, framed by the other books. The Bible is somewhat hard to see, though.

Wait, doesn't bokeh consist of blurred pinpoints of light? That's pretty much all I have to say about this, although the water drops are pretty good.

Banned for having such a strange, strange avatar that took me a whole seven seconds to figure out. (that hand is freaksum!)

Fortunately, a magic fairy queen comes along and makes sense of the senseless post above.

Granted, but the rest of the world *sniffs disdainly* hates writing, and they track you down for forcing such an unwanted exercise on them. I wish for fish.

Okay, it doesn’t make much sense. No problem, I can still correct your grammar. Under the canopy, the lights are nice, today. You don’t need the comma between ‘nice’ and ...

Alright, despite many spelling and grammar errors (and a few phrases that just plain didn’t make sense) you managed a good story. It’s not too clichéd, but you went so ...

Well, if it’s a part of a novel, then you shouldn’t have put it in General Fiction Short Stories, rather, file it under General Fiction Novels . Now, as a ...

Gah, blockatext attack! Cut it up or double space to make it roomier and less…daunting. It’s a good piece, but it’s rather short for a novel chapter. I say you ...

Very…strange. It is written in a style that sounds like you had a thesaurus open at your side and tried to use as many words as you could (but didn’t ...

Hello there, Shadow. Your story is…primitive, to say the least. I’m here to fix that. I was walking through the High Council, on my way to my office. When I ...

Well, dear, you needn’t bold everything, nor does it need to be centered. Also, those few places probably shouldn’t be blue. It’ll look more like a story this way, since ...

I came back because I said I *iked* it but forgot to click the button XD. I also noticed a few other things in the video. 1. You tilt your ...

I'm such a geek I knew I wouldn't be able to recognize whoever you drew before I even opened the spoiler. And after Ultraviolet told it, I was still like...who? ...

@Amy: No problem, my critique actually included a psychoanalysis of your MC, so don't feel bad (I actually feel kinda weird about that review now) @animalallover: Thanks! That's what I'm ...