Jenthura

Message Begin The Review Hey, Wannabe! You’ve got good potential, and this story could take off into a full-fledge novel. However, it’ll take some time and sorting and editing before ...

Fortunately, Arab men go back to sleep after being rudely awoken by a camel.

Shid A piece of firewood four feet long; A unit of length measuring four feet; Alternative spelling of should.

Unfortunately, no was around...which meant that you were lost and all alone in the biggest desert outside of Africa.

Great work! But I can see how you've compressed the plot that belongs in a book. Here in a short story, it sounds rushed at the end. I really think ...

'Naïve' can be somewhat synonymous with stupid, or gullible. It doesn't mean humble. 'Chaste' means innocent, also not humble. I've never heard the song, but I can imagine I wouldn't ...

Hi y'all! Here's a few more 'colorful' ones. Please, people, a little more than, "I like this!" I'd really like some advice on how to make it better! A little ...

Wait, wait, you? What happened to the moon-men? How did we get into second-person format? Whatever... Fortunately it was just a paintball grenade, and only splattered them with green goo.

Is that a word? Whatever.. whip

Someone mentioned her appearance, and you replied back, asking for clarification on what we wanted to be described. I’ve compiled a list of your descriptions of the freak to help ...

What Haha, you got us out of the rut, Hawk

[[Invaded My Mind]] What's with the brackets? And now,Look at Me. You need a space after the comma, and 'Look' doesn't need to be capitalized. If i could only take: ...

Hmm, very...intriguing, but where's the plot? The story? If you mean to continue it, then you should put a small note about that. By itself, it's not a very interesting ...

Hey there, you've got something good here. You have suspense building up and the poor guy's thoughts in the background and then, just when you're really expecting something from all ...

Yes! Thank you! ... But now what? wrop wrip trap X wrat wraf wlap >