JemimaPuddleDuck

If a swan, in its pure white elegance, was capable of the constant flittings of a bumblebee; If the solid oak, with roots deep would yeild the sweet elder's blossom; ...

This was lovely - so sad and heartfelt! You had all of the emotion, but perhaps were unable to show it through your writing in places. This is good though ...

ok - I apologise in advance but my way of reviewing things is to just re-write them. It's the easiest way to demonstrate my ideas. So here goes... a bridge ...

sky: subtly blushed with crimson by way of indefinable prophesy; and, soft as cotton, purest of mists settled, obscuring all sight. Such was the essence of magic. It lingered, sweet ...

would you do one of mine? Only if you want to- I have three, you could do any one of them :-) Thankyou!

would you review one of mine? I'm not sure which one - i've only 3 on here so you pick :-) thankyou!!!

I tend just to re-write people's poetry, as i'm not so good at telling what I mean, so instead I show it. At the end, I know you meant to ...

well what outstandingly splendid creations are these! :-) but I would like to add that you missed off an important one, which althougth was not composed on the M25, deserves ...

I like your idea, but you need some description and imagery. Make it seem more natural and subtle :-)

The sunset drips over the hill; A blaze of red, orange and pink, I think this is a lovely way to begin a poem, and this is the type of ...

i do like it a lot - but I think, without being too irritating, that when you are trying desperately to find exactly the right words for an idea (and ...

I'm not so good at reviews because i hate to say anything against what people have done - i know how attached you get to what you've written! But here ...

And she came home to dinner that evening: the personification of spring. Rosy cheeks and the sweet scent of blossom, and beauty with her did she bring. She rushed through ...

this is going to sound really bad coming from me because what do I know? but I think you could improve it by sitting down with a pen and paper ...

I love this poem so much! Please don't be angry but i have changed it a little bit below. I know what i is about and i know exactly how ...