JemimaPuddleDuck

We call 'High school' Secondary school by the way :-) Lytham St. Annes. Google it

OK thanks. Sorry about posting in two places!

Don't we get a friends list anymore?

Just wondering... Can't you have friends anymore? (on the new YWS I mean) ???

Oh! This is just about the funniest thing I've ever read :-) In a kind way of course :-) I think that for the purposes of this particular competition it ...

Hi! I am used to writing poetry, and so don't very often critique this sort of thing - sorry if it's not helpful! First the grammatical stuff: (in bold) Princess ...

I really loved this and I'm sorry that all I have to offer you is one of those annoying posts that have no suggestion as to how you could improve. ...

Oh! Joyful the sound of the pitter and patter- its fingers on glass, they do long to reach in; and she listened and watched all day long, as the gutters, ...

Oh, this is so sad! It's lovely - but sad!! Ok, I think it starts off well - Alone in this room, That's full of people. This is a very ...

Heavy lie the words unspoken: pressed unto the brave man's heart; from warm elysium awoken oft, and listens in the dark. Another's slumber also broken; he sits- wonders how to ...

Ok. All I can say is to read some poetry! This might be useful to you :-) Hope I was of some use to you!

Hi! I understand the message that you are trying to convey in this piece, but I have a few problems with it: Firstly you are over forcing a rhyme. You ...

beautiful

ok. I thought that this was lovely! It really is wonderful. The only things I could find were tiny tiny things to do with grammar (shown below). I also changed ...

ok. I understand your message that you wanted to put across, but this should be done using imagery and metaphors - not just telling us. try to make it more ...