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  • Other » Realistic, Satire
    Re: Bipolarity

    I'm afraid that I'm not in the position to rate you on the accuracy of your portrayal, but I can say that I like this. It's great that you portray ...

    Jul 6, 2012

  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Narrative
    Re: The Softening Of The Blow

    Hi A. Time for review spam? Time for review spam! Overall: This is awesome. Let's just. Say it. Completely awesome. There are a lot of great lines I loved here ...

    Jul 6, 2012

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: White Snow

    Hi! This is quite a nice poem. Overall: You write some very pretty images in very short lines, so they're almost like fleeting implications. Which I really like! I do ...

    Jul 6, 2012

  • Article / Essay » General, Realistic
    Re: Korean American

    Hey! This is great. It's eloquent, put-together, and thoughtful. I like the structure as well. I think it clarifies the overall arc of your realization without making it choppy. Your ...

    Jul 3, 2012

  • Other » General, General
    Re: just cold

    This isn't the easiest story to follow but I like that to some degree, as it forces readers to pay more attention and read slowly. Same with the lack of ...

    Sep 21, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Garden Of Words

    Hello there! I am here, if you hadn't guessed, to review! And review I shall! Very late, but who really cares? First I want to point out some phrases that ...

    Sep 14, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: The Space Between Infinity- 1.5

    Hello! I like the switch in perspective here because we get to learn more about Chloe, Tyler, and their relationship. I also liked how the reader is left wondering who ...

    Sep 11, 2011

  • Short Story » Romantic, General
    Re: Eyes.

    Hm, I'm not actually sure how I feel about the ending. Part of me is like, "Yay, they got together, I'm happy as a clam!" but another found the corniness ...

    Aug 25, 2011

  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General
    Re: What a Wonderful World.1 [deleted]

    I like the idea here and how it was written. I'm really looking forward to more! The characters were nice, I can't say more because it's the first chapter, but ...

    Jul 26, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Pornography Kiss (chapter 1)

    *dramatic theme music* Hi! I'm here to review! On the subject of being appropriate for the website, I mean, it's rated 18+, so I'm not seeing a problem. I don't ...

    Jul 20, 2011

  • Novel / Chapter » General, General
    Re: Live Ten (Prologue & Chapter One)

    Oh this will be fun. >:D I love the story idea. The style is nice and works well with the plot and premise. I like how you've set up the ...

    Jul 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: .

    xD Ha, you're the third I've met so far. Being an Asian girl, I find this amusing beyond belief. And you wrote this two years ago? Wow. I don't really ...

    Jul 19, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: wind swept

    Hi. I like the formatting and simplicity of this poem, as well as the rhyming, In the first phrase if the first stanza, I think you meant "swept" and in ...

    Jul 15, 2011

  • Article / Essay » General, General
    Re: An Evening with a Vegan

    The first words that come to mind (after wow, of course) are startling and familiar. I love all the observations you have. I found them familiar without ever consciously thinking ...

    Jul 11, 2011

  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General
    Re: Kurt

    I really enjoyed this. I like your take on time-travel. The alternate realities and what-not are always full of plot holes of mind-boggling proportions. I thought it ended at a ...

    Jul 10, 2011


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