Jelly

Hi! First off, you write description beautifully. This had an easy flow. I like the contrasting paragraphs in the beginning in particular. Okay, you might not need this warning, but ...

A BOLD piece indeed. I like the decision to use the capitalization, how it powerfully emphasizes words. The poem is, I suppose the best word to describe it is empowering. ...

Okay, firstly, this guy is an awesome philosopher. I love the originality of his character and the unique voice you write him with. His thought process is a mixture of ...

This is my first foray into the other parts of YWS. By "other parts" I mean, things that aren't my profile or "Discover Works". Okay. I'm going to talk about ...

COPY.JPG Oil with an acrylic base, based off a photo from an amazing book of funny looking chickens. COPY.JPG

Interesting set-up. There's some issues with punctuation (mostly lack of commas) that you should look into, but I don't think I saw anything else in terms of spelling/grammar. Also, maybe ...

Mwahaha, evil dictators for the win! Ahem. Good word choice/phrasing, as I sometimes find poems of these type to be a little too straightforward. But this has you know, specifics, ...

Based off a photo of a bird I took in the Everglades.

Hm... not too much I can say about this that hasn't already been expressed. But I figure since this is just that great, it deserves another full review of gushing. ...

Greetings! :) So, I can definitely identify with this poem. I think a lot of people can. I like the simple style because it lets the meaning shine through clearly, ...

Note: I could possibly expand this into an actual story, but I do kind of like it the way it is. I wrote this on a whim for a random ...

Yay, awesome first chapter. As I expressed in the prologue, I love your idea of having a fantasy story set in Africa. I'm excited to see how fantasy is going ...

Wow. I have to say, this is probably my favorite out of all the poems I've seen on YWS so far. The run-on sentences don't really bother me at all, ...

Great poem! I'm trying to squeeze some critique out of my mind... no, I can't really. Interesting subject, it reminds me of ancient Egyptians and their attitude on the afterlife. ...

I'm really liking it so far. The intro was especially original. And I actually mean that, I have the oddest soft spot for that sort of style. Paradise's bit was ...