Jelen

So I’m in North Bend Hospital cleaning out the bed pans of dilapidated grandmas and dropping hunks of near frozen apple sauce into half-comatose patients when—wait, I should probably tell ...

The stanzas and rhythm that you use here make this read more like a story and less like a poem. It is very difficult to find a cadence here, and ...

I…well I thoroughly enjoyed this. You are an excellent writer, and in my opinion everything from here on out hinges on your plot. Keep it unique and interesting and you ...

Although I am intrigued by the idea of a story such as this—using a perspective that is not traditionally presented—I think you should be very wary of the level of ...

This is only the bare beginning! It is well-written, certainly, and although it is a relatively generic start, you have some excellent imagery here, it has some real potential. Do ...

You have approached this issue extremely well. Cutting is something that is usually isolated in an emotional realm, but when it is presented that way, readers can more easily dismiss ...

This is an interesting story, in that it's very straight forward, and I think the beginning of your plot is very strong. I rounded the corner, back to the block ...

I really like this a lot. It flows exceptionally well, and I think you have a good sense of your own speed throughout. I hit a few snags, which I ...

This is fantastic. You have a definite affinity for dialogue, and it shows here: everything is very natural, and the whole story is very concrete. My only issue, as a ...

My first review here, so take it all with a grain of salt, if you would. Also, if you could excuse any language difficulties...English is not my native tongue! I ...