Jeanette

I love the language you used! It creates a vague image without really giving anything away, leaving the reader to create their own meaning and insert their own tribulations in, ...

Thanks for reviewing! I've gotten another review that critiqued the way I introduced characters (it was on the other story, I moved it because someone paired another story with mine). ...

Wow, long review. First off, the one thing that bugged me in your review (and I do understand that it's a review so it's supposed to bug me-so to speak) ...

Very well written; I love the style. It puts the person in the same position as the narrator. The emotions that you describe, and they way you describe them make ...

One “I’m not going,” I stated, yet again, to my friend, Caroline. “Oh come on Alex, you can’t back out on me now!” She whined, flinging her dirty blond hair ...

Chapter 1 : Jacob "So, Jacob, I heard you went to the Alps during the summer?" I looked up from my iPod to see Mallory in front of me. A ...

Really interesting angle! The colors really compliment each other too!

...I think I'm doing this right...Anyways, we'll see. The repetition of words was an attempt to pull things together (make connections in the mind, I'm guessing it got too repetitive ...

Move ing somewhere else, my story was coupled with someone else's for reasons I don't know.

:Jeanette: Prologue “There once was an old-time legend, that spoke of a Moonlight Goddess, and as she danced in the night in the meadow white roses sprouted at her feet. ...

:Jeanette: ["Nightmare..." is always supposed to be italicized for whispering, but it wouldn't let me for some reason...] Nightmare... [i]Nightmare... Through the shadows, under the night, I hear not

:Jeanette: You've built me up so I would fall, Come crashing down and lose it all, To look up and see you still standing tall, And to once again rebuild ...