Jay

Hello! First of all, you need to do two reviews for each piece of work posted, so now you need to do two reviews. The first two paragraphs should be ...

Hi fatimachan! Sorry it took me so long to get round to reviewing this... It's a very intense and strong poem. It definitely breaks the mold-it isn't the cliched "I'm ...

Well, I'm not sure what the title should be from this excerpt-I'd need to have a plot synopsis to make some suggestions. This is a good beginning. I like the ...

A solid and promising beginning here. From reading this short bit, I can already tell that the protagonist has low self-esteem and life has dealt her some hard blows. This ...

I'll start with the good and finish with the bad. (But there really is a lot more good than bad! :D ) I really like the narrator-she is instantly likable. ...

Wow. This was moving, gritty and hard-hitting-you tell it like it is and it isn't fluffified at all. I also want to say that you're very brave to approach writing ...

The first thing that stands out to me is how convincingly you wrote Johnny's stream of consciousness. It's a real skill to be able to write from a three-year-old's viewpoint ...

I think this was well-written, readable and professional. I really liked the line "we don't care about the government or the recession". It tells it like it is, it's unabashed ...

I am really impressed with this-it's my cup of tea. I actually like how the poem appears disconnected to the rest of the beginning-it gets the reader wondering about what ...

Nodding along with tnme22 and Lucy here-it is very long. But it is also very good, and it's evident you spent a lot of time and effort on this. It's ...

First of all, we have a rule that you do two reviews for every piece of work you post. So you need to do two reviews to balance this piece ...

I like this. It's sweet and funny. Something about it really appeals to me. The dialogue is the standout in your writing-it's realistic and funny. The idea is also interesting, ...

Wow, I was certainly impressed with this. It's gritty and harrowing, without being too complex or wordy. It is also very dark and mature compared with what I often see ...

Wow-this is sure impressive. It's sophisticated, quirky and different from what I usually see here. And the description is very detailed. I wasn't moved emotionally by this, but that's not ...

Wow. This was dramatic, compelling and powerful. It is very dark, and I don't really like reading dark stories, but that's more a personal issue. The description is vivid and ...