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Hey, it's Hawkie, and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, welcome to YWS! Second of all, your review. He was a sweet young boy Just turned seven Killed ...

Well it was okay. I like the idea but you didnt get into it at all, we don't even know if the main character if male or female! When the ...

Too much onomatopoeia (sp?). I liked the impact of it but if you could explain because what it seemed like was someone comparing their heartbeat then dying. It was in ...

They met at a ball She wore a white dress They chatted like old friends She fiddled with her hair, every tress They became good friends She wore a white ...

WEll i liked it, i didnt like how you explained every single thing that happened to him (I assume) with such detail. I agree the last sentence wasn't that great ...

When i read stories, i do not look for grammar mistaks as most other people do. I look for parts that seem dull or dont fit in and try to ...

This is extremely good. I loved how you didnt tell the gender or age of this character, even though you gave hints to what it was as in when you ...

He was a sweet young boy His name was Kevin Killed by a monster The year he turned seven He rode his bike He played games with jacks The town ...

I liked it but... 1. It really wasn't a poem more like a story. 2. There was really no point to it. 3. It was kind of cheesy. What I ...

WEll, 1. I kinda liked the twilight series at first but after thinking about them its REALLY stupid. First they meet, then they fall in love like 2 days l8er, ...