JapaneseNinja

Just a really quick reply. Try spacing and creating stanza's in the appropriate places. It will make it easier to read and more appealing to the eyes. I like the ...

At first it was funny because the heart was black! xD But when you squint really hard... and stare for a really long time... and keep telling yourself it's a ...

First off, this is a strong poem. It says what you the author was inteding for it to say. You know what I mean? It's very straight forward. But one ...

Young cats rollin' with b-ball bats and with our backwards gangsta cats we put dogs down like bathroom mats we are worse than yo meow mix with trans fats Homie ...

Ok, I read this and kinda stopped during the first stanza. I noticed that the grammar was a little off. The word "Their" should be replaced by the word "They ...

I'm a bounty hunter that will slip behind you and cut your throat if you piss me off. If i don't feel like cutting throats, I'll snipe you.

I really like the story, but I was confused in most points. I don't understand who they are, so when he gets killed, I don't really feel sad or anything. ...

I'm not the kind of person who will tell you if you have grammar mistakes or not, but I know when I see a good story, and I think this ...

I like the story so far, but if I were you, I would get some grammar help from somebody, friends or family. Anybody will work. It just seems a bit ...

@ Sureal. I explain how he can speak from the beginning in chapter. 2 Thanks for all the help on the punctuation, I'm hoping to use it from now on! ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...

Well first off, I'm not a great writer so I can't give you any advice or anything like that. Nut I do know that this is an awesome story. I ...