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Re: Slaughter House Angel
She wore white robes and her feet were bare And silver dust & gold tinsel were in her hair She had bright red lips and just-pinched cheeks A spectacle to ...
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Re: D is for Difficulty
HAHA. yeah, i realized that yesterday. tsktsk. thanks for pointing it our... :)
Sep 14, 2008 -
Re: Howdy!
reading, being a nerd, biting, poking my friends, making new buddies everybody is a nerd in their own way. welcome to yws. i LOVE it here. i'm sure you will ...
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Re: Midnight Stars
this is going to be line by line. --- I face your back, [change could be something like, i stare at your back, i gaze at your back or something] ...
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Re: Rain!
short.poignant.sweet. pretty poem. i liked this. it reminds me of my first poem, which was about rainbows.
Sep 14, 2008 -
Re: Newbie!
A fellow Filipino!! Hello there! I'm Casey, I'm a Filipino too!! I'm so glad that another fellow Filipino joined the site!! Welcome to YWS! Okay, before anything else, I've got ...
Sep 14, 2008 -
Re: Newbie!
Haha, we like writers better than journalists anyway. ;) Also! You're lucky for having shelves. I don't have bookshelves and I am hoping/praying that when I get my own room ...
Sep 14, 2008 -
Re: J is for JANNIE
I'm Janna. Please call me Jannie . I'm 17,straight,Filipina. I'm a sophomore at a University that frustrates me as a student nurse, but I have to deal with it just ...
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Re: It’s The End Say “Goodbye”
It was a LITTLE poem. i dont even want to start on the grammar. but still...improve..
Sep 13, 2008 -
Re: Her
okayy, so i'm a grammar freak. yeah i am...so... her we go... i have a problem with your CAPITALIZATION! --- She Walks Past Me Everyday, The Smell Of Her Perfume ...
Sep 13, 2008 -
Re: soul mate
here I go again. I'll go line by line... --- I will never get to see you, Hold your hand, [i'd suggest : OR HOLD YOUR HAND] Sit next to ...
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Re: Orange Peel and Apple Pips
i have poems like this.the rhyme thingy. i LOVE poems with the rhyme thingy. it's got loads of potential. --- LINE BY LINE COMMENTARY... There must be more to life ...
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Re: Love in P-land America (OVER SIXTEEN)
okayy. i read and reread this. it didn't sink in the first time *blush* i didn't like the way profanity was used,but in the did fit. i just cant quite ...
Sep 13, 2008 -
Re: Removed #2
I think they wanted to save your life Or keep a poor 16 year old from a lot of strife. --- okayyy. the line above was OUCH! it seemed...errr...forced? but ...
Sep 13, 2008 -
Re: Growing Up
Nobody wanted an ugly wife Nobody who was anybody anyway... --- i liked the lines above. i guess because it's a fact. yeah. it is. anyway, this poem would have ...
Sep 13, 2008
