Jamie_rocks

Well done, I really liked it. there was a few phrases with awkward wording, but the others caught all of them. I'd like to see where this story goes. There ...

I like it, and I know you had a page limit, but I think you should re-do it now that the assignment is over, make it a bit longer. Also, ...

I liked this piece, with a little work it could be really good. I'm not gonna repeat all the typos since everyone else already did. I agree though, when I ...

OMG! I love Warriors. Dark River is amazing! I can't believe how it turned out, but I won't say anything for fear of spoilers. And the manga books are cool ...

I think you're good at writing, but this is kind of shady. It's short, so there isn't much to comment on. However, since this is the beginning you should spend ...

Awwww man, I came too late for the cookies. :( That was really good though. The actual Cinderella is really boring now, but this new twist is hilarious, you've just ...