Jackie-In-A-Box

Sure! Reading over it again, it's pretty much just the second line in a few of the stanzas is a a bit long - you don't have to change it ...

Alone, I stand in the shadowy autumn dusk A sweetness tasted in the air, remains; And the evening smells of softest, darkest, musk. To leave this place would break me ...

Hello, my YWS friend! Man, i love reading stuff like this. I agree, it's such a cinderella story, but it's cool. Im Christian too (god rocks) and it's nice to ...

lol i really liked it! its funny, love the buddah comment at the end. the dont do drugs reminded me of this guy at a christian concert who got high ...

That's beautiful. Have you shown it your mum? I know criticising someones feelings can be tactless, but I only have one thing to say anyway. It doesn't always follow the ...

I liked it. It's a nice change from depressing and/or constant serious stuff. Nice to know that a sense of humour exists in the world. What were those question marks ...

I'm still walking down that road You left me on Where I ran out of the building Hiding meaning under excuses and hiding tears in the rain. I still stop ...

I like it, it's really good. I like how you use 'the' mirror, because it makes it less personal and kind of removes emotion from it, but shows how the ...