JabberHut

Heya! You probably don't know me (or maybe you do *shrug*) but I noticed this and thought I would crit! ^^ *begins to read* I had friends, I had a ...

Hey! I'll come back to read more 'cause I have to do, but I do have one suggestion/comment about the French. “Ampèreheure ! POUSSE ! POUSSE ! POUSSE ! Non, ...

Ah, I finally have time to crit. ^^ *begins to read* “Same thing, in my book. No comma should be in this sentence. ^^ Her wrath would be like the ...

Hey, came to read part 2! I thought it was pretty good. One line could use some review: And Kwest and Cere headed off toward Galeon, their new life, little ...

Hello! Looked like you needed a few reviews! ^^ "You okay?" you asked scared for the answer Comma after "asked" and a period at the end. "Charlotte's Web" you said ...

Hey, 'tis Jabber! I don't know if you know me, but now you do! :D Thought you'd want another crit of encouragement! ^^ It was actually pretty good. Right away, ...

Ooh, the first one to crit. How exciting! *begins to read* “You've got five seconds before before your wife dies. Oops! ^^ and most of all he hated that children ...

This was wonderful, Kylan! It was certainly realistic, the characters introduced very well. Amazing comparisons too: metaphors, similes, etc. Excellent! I spotted a few grammar mistakes, but the other

Ah, well...writing doesn't make me feel entirely like a god (or goddess, if you wanna get technical. :wink: ). Yes, I suppose I can make my characters do what they ...

Hello! You don't know me, but I was just browsing for pieces to crit and found yours critless! :o That can't be! *starts to read* leaving the Bathroom as immaculate ...

Hello! Thought I'd drop by and take a look-see...*starts to read* There he stood, tall, slim, but in his own way , handsome Is that highlighted part even necessary? Is ...

Hey, it's Woodland Wolf! Welcome to YWS! We met in the chat, remember? Ja? No? Well, I'm gonna crit anyway. I hope I'm somewhat helpful. I'm a big grammar nit-pick, ...

Thanks sooo much for the crits! I would be happy to return the favor! Just PM me! Fantasyartist-- I edited the story to show the reader, but her title is ...

It's kinda long for a prologue, so it may just end up being chapter 1. I made it a prologue, though, because the next part will be years later when ...

Heya, came to read your story. I'm excited, it's an awesome idea for you and Timea to do this kind of duo series. It was early summer, and a thirteen ...