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Hello again! Justin We didn’t do anything to Sarah, [dash or semi instead] just urged her on. No comma should go there. Commas don't separate independent clauses like this without ...

Hello there! The man ignores her, [s]instead[/s] folding the aged paper gently in his hands. He folds it one way, [no comma] then the other, his motions slow and precise. ...

Hello! :) Grammar and First Impressions A small clearing in a very large and almost uninhabited woods stood quiet and still. Two figures wandered quietly into it, the soft moonlight ...

Hello! Here upon request and desire! :) Some people may argue that people in my profession cannot feel love , or that it is easier for us to move on ...

Hey, Suz! Just for you, I'm gonna nit-pick to the bone. :) They screamed all night until their mother managed to find morphine, [no comma] and end their torture. A ...

Hello! I walked out of our small house, [no comma] and stood on the tall rock. There must be a subject and a verb on either side of the contraction ...

Hello! Here upon request and desire! :) I breathe in , savoring the scent that is wholly his. I taste old cigarettes and beer on his tongue. [dash instead] A ...

Hiya! ^^ Every night I write in this journal , and every night I go to sleep in tears. Not necessarily just my eating habits, [no comma] but also my ...

Yay! Part 8! :D I was just wondering when I'd see this the other day. :lol: “This place is messy!” I said , looking around at all the ropes and ...

Hello! Thanks for that recap in the beginning. It's been a while, and I would have forgotten everything. ^^; Bullets began to whiz past their legs and shoulders as soldiers ...

Back again! :D The rebellion sat quietly around their table, thoughts scurrying in and out of their heads, brainstorming. The clock ticked on the wall behind them, giving the room ...

Hello again! Sick of me yet? :wink: He was quite bubbly , thinking of how splendid a full world would be like. Even when he was younger the streets were ...

Hello! Sorry I didn't get to this sooner. ^^ They wrap around you, strangling, suffocating, stealing your breath. [comma instead?] Crushing you, [no comma] and cutting off all circulation. The ...

Hello! I'm doing this at school, outside the comforts and assistance of home, so we'll see what happens, aye? :D A moment later, Gideon stood still, hands on his knees, ...

Hello! Here upon request and desire! :) Grammar I don't know why You chose me -- It was early July, 1993. I knew my life would never be the same ...