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So I'm far too lazy to read everybody else's replies on this, so if I repeat something, forgive me. I'll get right into it. As I watched, he rubbed his ...

Hey there! Wonderful description, this is one of the few truly well-written pieces I've seen here in a while. It may go a little to the detriment of other things ...

Hey, Elinor. Overall: The subtext behind the plot is just a tad overdone, and I was disappointed with the lack of description. However, this piece is still pretty good, and ...

Hey there, Jiggity! Let's get right to it. The moon watches their game in amusement, coming and going many a time, but never content to leave it entirely. It took ...

Hey, Ben! Welcome to YWS, blah blah blah. I'm JK. First off: This piece is a little rough around the edges. I think your brain and your hands may not ...

Hey, I'm JK :) First off, I really liked this. I don't often get to see people write my kind of stories. You know, the good kind ;) Anyways, I ...

Hey, there :) So first off, I'm not necessarily a big fan of the second half of this description. His muscles screamed in protest and his bones cracked and popped ...

I'm afraid this is a medium where your general audience isn't going to know what DCI is. Hence,Kyllorac's comment. But cliche as it may be, it is true. Are you ...

This was good, I liked it. I haven't really seen any stories like this before--drugs, yes. From the perspective of the younger brother, no. It did, however, feel a little ...

The quality of your writing is very, very good. It's just a little disjointed. I liked it, but I would have liked it a lot better if there was a ...

Hey, Lethero :D I don't have very much to comment about because for the most part, the writing is pretty good. Your style is pretty developed, which is more than ...

Hey, Sela! Welcome to the library. I like this. It sort of reminds me of the song Welcome to the Jungle. Now I wish I hadn’t been so critical – ...

Hey, Maddy! Nice beginning. :D Creativity seems to strike at the most peculiar moments, she thought as her mind and her hand raced each other to complete sentence after sentence, ...

Yeah, it's tough to find synonyms for colors when there's only one perfect one and all the rest are crap. But thank you, that was very nice. And it's whatever ...

"Rosie. Rose." He stared across the table, his hazel eyes pleading. He tilted his head to the side, trying to catch her eye. "Look at me. Look at me, Rosie. ...