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Re: Elephant Tales
Hi again, VivelaMusique :) Thanks for reading more of my writing. To answer the majority of your questions, none of this was meant to be literal. The tone is literal ...
Jun 29, 2009 -
Re: A little editorial on the gun
This is interesting, a good perspective of what really makes guns dangerous. I especially loved the line "A gun can turn a man into a lot of things: hero, villain, ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: War Speech (Intoxicated)
This is funny! A little confusing..nazis and commies in the same time as slaves? Overall, your tone fits perfectly for what your putting across, and you managed to do it ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: Elephant Tales
I was given this assignment a long time ago, and, in apathy, didn't write it until the night before it's due date. This was totally improvised and I was exhausted ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: Crazy as I am
Hi! I really enjoyed this piece. The biggest issue is the grammar. There's quite a few mistakes, but as they've already been pointed out, I would just like to compliment ...
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: On the Subtle Differences Between Identity and Culture
On the Subtle Differences between a Person’s Identity and his Societies’ Culture You cannot keep a culture private, individual, or traditional without first betraying society’s most important ne
Jun 18, 2009 -
Re: How to Be an Evil Mastermind {intro}
This is really creative! Some grammar mistakes that have already been addressed, so I don't need to talk about, but it's a good, catchy intro. This sentence ("...and what are ...
May 26, 2009 -
Re: This I believe...
The message in this is strongly put across. You clearly display your mindset, and how your work ethic has paid off for you. Readers may relate more if you were ...
May 26, 2009 -
Re: Death's Visit
This is very humorous, though unrealistic as a play. I love the awkward familiarity between death and Tom. I also love how death is so casual and seemingly in no ...
May 25, 2009
