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Red heads are said to be more seductive, I've heard. xD Ah well, lol. Haha another reason to dye my hair.

Hahahahaha ohmyGOODNESS. I just... you just... ohmyGOODNESS. (Hermione has BROWN hair, by the way.) No words. None at all. ~JFW1415

I'm pretty sure the police would come to the door? Not positive, but I think so. Do some research first. =] Write the emotions - the after-affects - while you ...

haha, I guess I don't make myself very clear. =] It's a little kid who sleep walks. Her (or his, I guess) parents are 'they'. He subconsciously is trying to ...

Thanks guys! Cross: I definitely want to consider your critique, but I'm not sure where you see the problems. Could you be a little more specific so I can look ...

If you have a problem with going about that, I suggest working specifically on the 'cracks of the earth' part first. It is, after all, the title of this piece. ...

Edited - please critique this version. =] I'm not planning on changing the grammar parts. I may add a little bit - questions marks, maybe a comma before 'yes' and ...

Thanks for the reviews! For all of you complaining about the grammar, it was deliberate. Yes, I know how to write. But I tried it and it really didn't fit ...

Thanks! I know, it was confusing. It's supposed to be about a girl with anxiety - none of this really happens. I edited it though, so hopefully it's better? More ...

Thank you so much! Edited with many of your suggestions, and some of my own thoughts. Any more opinions? ~JFW1415

Thank you all for your wonderful comments. Although, I fail to see how the repetition of the email can confuse you. Please explain, because I don't understand. -Jared It's confusing ...

Haha, guess I can't get away with not giving you a critique? xD Of course I liked it - I always LOVE your work. But I hardly even remember what ...

I think I need to read about Batman before I can judge this. So... ignore my critique. xD 'cause apparently this is amazing, which is obvious 'cause it's you . ...

O.O Duuuude. This is fanfiction. *Fails epically* I don't really check genres? 'specially if I click from home page? *Dies* So only two and four apply? Kinda? xD ~JFW1415

Edited once more. xD ~JFW1415