JFW1415

Edited - please critique this version. =] I'm not planning on changing the grammar parts. I may add a little bit - questions marks, maybe a comma before 'yes' and ...

I don't talk to my characters, but they talk to each other, which is how I get most of my stories. They are real, in a sense. In the world ...

Thanks for the reviews! For all of you complaining about the grammar, it was deliberate. Yes, I know how to write. But I tried it and it really didn't fit ...

*loves* I took another stab at poetry. I had this title from ages ago, and I tried writing a short story with it, but this came out instead. =] It's ...

into the cracks of the earth what would you do if I took a chance stepped up close and whispered softly kiss me what would you say if the world ...

Thanks! I know, it was confusing. It's supposed to be about a girl with anxiety - none of this really happens. I edited it though, so hopefully it's better? More ...

Thank you so much! Edited with many of your suggestions, and some of my own thoughts. Any more opinions? ~JFW1415

Working title. Help on it please? EDIT: New version that hopefully makes more sense. EDIT TWO: I like this a lot better. =] ----- The only sound in the room ...

Well, this computer probably says I'm a 49 year old women, divorced, with 2 children, one 15 and one 18, and an average income of $70,000. I am 15, female, ...

they're too pretty to be scary. -SpongeBob

Hello! My name is SpongeBobSquarePants, and I live in a pinnaple under the sea. It's actually quite nice down here, but it's really hard to get Internet service - the ...

The requested critique- Honestly, there’s not much point to this story at the moment. It’s going very slowly and I’m growing bored quickly. You need to give the reader a ...

The requested critique- I purposefully didn't read the prologue before this because 90% of the time they're not needed. I was fine without reading it, so why include it? I ...

Hey! Here’s your requested critique as a prize for entering CIA’s February contest before the 15th. I know – I’m super late, but better late than never, si? Anyways, you ...

Another critique for entering the CIA sacrifice contest: In stories, people like to see variation. In sentence structure, sentence length, paragraph length, chapter length – everything. All your par