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Re: Tangled Up In Blue
Nit-Picks The asshole comes in wearing a suit. With a tie, and everything. Ditch the comma. And what's with the sudden POV swith? First we were with Cal, now Tom? ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: Tangled Up In Blue
*Insert un-needed opener here* Nit-Picks In fact, I have to say that it’s bit unnerving, actually. Use either 'in fact' or 'actually,' but not both. No girl got be Huh? ...
Jul 20, 2008 -
Re: Tangled Up In Blue
Hey Icaruss! Here's the promised (and very late) critique! Nit-Picks Remember when you told me that—? No, well, of course you don’t. Sorry, silly question. It’s just that I always ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Runner
*Glee* You never have short pieces, Con! My stuck-on-vacation-mode brain thanks you. So, here comes the much delayed but promised critique! Nit-Picks I want to stop; Why's he want to ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Gypsie Eyes: prologue and chapter one
Gryf! I have finally come to give you the promised critique – I'm so sorry about the wait. Prologue Instead their eyes were focused on the frail boy who sat ...
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: Crazy Little Thing I
*Takes a deep breath, then screams:* Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr iiiiiiiiiii
Jul 19, 2008 -
Re: God Still Loves You (5)
Well, my contest is finally over, so I can critique this! You did an excellent job – I haven't read these in ages, yet I remembered it all right away. ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: The Ultimatum
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Renegades
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: On End
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Diggin' for Gold
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Fairytales Don't Exist
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Saving Michael
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: A Lively Conversation Between Two Corpses (1)
The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: America!
Ok, so you need some help with ya recerchin' of good ol' NYC. I go there EVERY YEAR so I should know. 1. use 'a at the end of each ...
Jul 11, 2008