JFW1415

Hello! I was looking for stuff to critique, and settled on this. XD Overall Comments Since it's so short, I'll throw everything into the overall one. XD - Write [/spoiler] ...

~ the following actions taken by the main character or any other character should NOT be re-enacted or re-written, this novel has already been written and has a copyright, any ...

(By the way, does anyone know why the chat is gone? Nate never gave a reason, are we being grounded or something? =( ) PSHH, he'd tell us if that ...

Hello! I'm the lame-bum who critiques random stories, so here I am! XD “Eve! Over here.” A man's voice called out to me. I was at the bar when I ...

Critique number 2 1/2 for third in my Side Characters Contest. Sorry it took so freaking long to post this. I completely forgot about it + the first half of ...

Weird, I've posted two reviews since I posted here, and it's still saying 683. I checked it out - you're using attachments, which don't count. So just copy and paste ...

Hello! Nit-Picks It had been common knowledge of the people of Cyris since the Great City’s dawning, the unspoken rule of thumb, for the Night was a stealthy creature. So, ...

Hello! I'm Jen/Jelly/JFW/1415/whatever you'd like to call me. I was browsing through the forums and saw that this only had one critique and, while it looks like a good one, ...

So, I was browsing through the forums and saw that this had no critiques. Someone did beat me to it, but I'll still give you mine. XD> Nit-Picks The air ...

Hello! I was just browsing through the forums and saw that this only had one critique, so I decided to give you one! Hope you like it. Nit-Picks It's been ...

Hey! I was just looking through the forums, saw that this only had one critique, and decided to give you one. So! Here goes... Nit-Picks He swallowed. “Absolutely not.” You ...

PSHH. I can try, but I don't know how I'll do. I take a long time to do crits. XD> 315 ~JFW1415

Edited! I tried to use all of your comments, but to Jare: I'm just a weirdo with my dashes, so. XD> Ooers! But that might mean less words? Si, it ...

All right, so my aunt entered us in this contest a while ago, wanting to see how different our responses to the same prompt is. I have 24 hours to ...

Aw! Thank you so much JFW! ^__^ I do see what you mean - I went back through that segment and deleted some things, and I'll probably eventually give the ...