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The promised critique! Before I begin, I'd just like to point out one line that I had a problem with… “Everyone’s different. Married?” he replies. If you read it out ...

The promised critique! set up relationships Right now, I'm confused. What do these people mean to one another? True, you don't have many characters yet, but what about the ones ...

Yepp, there was room, scasha. However, now the list is full so I will not be accepting anymore requests until I clear it out. Con: Hopefully I'll be getting to ...

Night, you're all done. Any others? ~JFW1415

The promised critique! Well, my first concern is that you don't really know what a prologue is. Actually, most of the people who have critiqued this don't. Prologues aren't supposed ...

*Hugs Meep* Welcome back! ~JFW1415

Hmm, lets see what using the caps lock button feels like. Is it weird? Is it odd? Yeah, it's super odd, haha. It's easy to turn on, but I forget ...

All empty except for Con's, but I'm planning on doing all the chapters of Creep, so I'll get to his a bit later. Fill up these spots people! :) (Oh, ...

The promised critique! Once again, I'm ignoring grammar/spelling. But I will leave you a link on dialogue punctuation – read it, learn it, love it . *In Sing-Song-y Voice* Yoooouuuu ...

The promised critique! Well, just so you know, I totally ignored both grammar and spelling in this critique. Why? Well, I'm lazy, that's for sure, but mainly I've just been ...

The promised critique! Well, I know you only wanted me to critique the second chapter, but I just wanted to touch upon this lightly before going there. Plus it's late, ...

Read the post goose, I am only asking for one review :p but the part that needs reviewing is chapter two! The first two have been looked over really well ...

OE! You broke the rules! One request a time, missy. ;) ~JFW1415

The promised critique! A Quick Nit-Pick “I know…but eventually they’ll love us.” I'd like to see more of a hesitation here. It's also a great opportunity to break the repeating ...

The promised critique! To Follow a Trend I don't know why, but recently it seems all of YWS has been starting their pieces with a one sentence paragraph. It's supposed ...