JFW1415

Here’s the promised critique. Keep in mind, though, that I’m not very good at poetry, so this won’t be a great critique. =] I know poetry is supposed to be ...

So I’m just doing chapter one, at least for now, because I’m lazy and this is long. =] Check your PMs for more information. Anyways, on to the critique! A ...

I swear I’m not only reviewing this because it’s short! Honest! No, really! ...Okay, maybe I am. But it’s still a review, so deal. =] Honestly, this feels more like ...

Ouch, that was harsh of her! Aww, you’re mean to Issaiah. But be proud that you can make me say that! I like how you had me get a feel ...

Before I begin, I must say that I loved that last sentence. “be a little crass” – so perfect. Anyways, this was good, and it’s a nice outlook on life. ...

So it's summer time and I'm open for business once more! Sign up. =] ~JFW1415

1. Where would you travel to? Time travel or regular travel? I would want to travel everywhere! Europe, Japan, Africa, anywhere different. (I’m from the USA). I would want to ...

Show vs. Tell I’m sure you’ve heard this a thousand times before, but you have a classic show vs. tell scenario here. You spend a lot of time telling me ...

Places Where You Can Add Background I’m not entirely sure what background information you want to add, but here are some spots where it would work well: Drinking was illegal ...

A Hook Right off the bat, I’m not very hooked. I would suggest switching to passive voice here. I know that’s a huge “no-no”, but you’re attempting to make the ...

I am one of those instructors who disappeared and then feared returning. =] I feel strange around here after ditching my title. Yes, it's less stress, but I look like ...

Outline when you're sick. You get the beeeest ideas that way, crazy enough to last 50k. =] *currently has the flu* ~JFW1415

O; it defff made me think ^___^ I did 1046 words in 41 minutes O; wooohoooooo and im a chicken peck typer XD i wish beyond anything that I could ...

My first thoughts were Alex and Brandon. Alex: Very open and out-going. Brandon: Shy and weary. ~JFW1415

I usually get my characters from my title, and my plot from my characters, and as of right now I have a title and characters. I just decided to do ...