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Okay, so I just updated. Any reviews after this are going to be for the revised one... :P Thanks!

I like it! But you still don't have much emotion. You were getting better with the scene in the hospital, but still, wouldn't they be relieved to find people? Wouldn't ...

Thanks for the review! I was kind of going for that whole unknown idea in the prologue. Basically the rest will be different character's reflection on what happened (like the ...

Prologue Hunter Garrett. Even now, four years after his death, my body shudders at the thought of him. I don’t do so in fear, however, like most people. I’m not ...

The first part bored me. A lot. It doesn't do the story justice. And we don't need to know the exact year, as long as we know it's not in ...

Again, I LOVE this. There were a lot of flash-backs, which gave us much needed info, but I'd suggest adding more stuff about what was happening in the present. Other ...

I really love this! How you keep fitting in the dougnut thing is really cool. Also, now I'm starting to remember who's who (which is amazing for me,) and you're ...

Because one word, one flick of the hand, one glance, can be your end. Love this part! :P Also, the character part confuzes me a bit. I can't keep them ...

I really liked this! I wish you had began in a battle scene to continue the beginning part, though. My brain's half-asleep, so I had to read that part twice, ...

Thanks so much! I'm going to try and rewrite this on Monday, since I'll be away all weekend. I'll also review your stories then. Also, do you think I should ...

Yeah, it's fine if you call me Jen. Or JFW. Whatever you'd like, really. :P I'm not posting my last name here, so I don't mind being called by my ...

Cinnamon And Pine Needles My breathing quickens, and I kick my legs, causing my warm quilt to fall to the floor. My eyes open suddenly, rescuing me from my restless ...

Thanks! And this wasn't supposed to be a story, it's just a quick little scene, so I'm not going to expand it at all. I'm just trying to get back ...

Thanks! That's my biggest problem with grammar-apostrophes after an s. I'll go fix that, though.

What Are Pets For? A soft pink glow slowly began to light the dark room, illuminating the furniture; a couch, bookcase, and piano. The bookshelf was overflowing with books of ...