JFW1415

I liked this. It seems like we get to know the characters too much for it to be written so formaly, if that makes sense. I'd add names if I ...

Alright, I added the revised version. All edits after this are to that. (Also, this post is more for myself, so I don't get confuzed, which happens often. :P )

Everyone before me has pointed out most of the mistakes. The only thing I could find, was that the first sentence didn't really pull me in. The rest kept my ...

I updated! :P

The prologue is here: Hunter Garrett The warm rays from the sun radiated onto my face as I leaned against the oak tree, the rough bark rubbing against my back. ...

Sorry, sworddance. I have to go to school. I'll work on it there, and hopfully type it up once I get here. Although, if I have other reviewers, it might ...

Alright, I just posted the revised one. Please review, ad read my note after the prologue. ~JFW1415

Love it! I couldn't find anything. I'm dying to know what this all means, though! PM me the second you post more/edit more/post any other story, please! :P Also, sorry ...

Your English is good! Much better than my Spanish. :oops: If you need anything reviewed, need help with English, or just feel like talking, feel free to PM me. I'm ...

Hello! I'll try to remember to call you that, but I'll probably forget... :oops: Feel free to PM me if you want me to review any of your work, or ...

Hello! Feel free to PM me anytime-whether it's for reviewing or just something random, I'll respond. :P

Welcome! Writing many different genres is good-more people read them. Be sure to PM me if you want anything reviewed, or for anything at all!

Thanks for the review! I'll probably fix that and re-post...again. :P And it was supposed to be just 'brushed off as if it were dust,' because she doesn't really show ...

I didn't mean to put dimwits twice. I didn't realize that i did. I'm going to post a revised version in about a half-hour, after dinner, but I won't be ...

Hello! I'm also the baby of the family, with one older brother. *Sulks* Hope you enjoy yourself on here! Feel free to PM me if you need anything reviewed! I'm ...