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I'd love any feedback on this possible, but I do have three things I was really unsure of. 1. The first two sentences. 2. The fact that it is present ...

I liked the idea for this story, but the end seems slightly rushed. You had no detail in the end, so I couldn't picture it, which is probably why it ...

I absolutely loved this! It was really creative to write it in the point of view of the crutch. Also, I liked this: I suppose I should support the side ...

Lucius Cain, a soldier in the glorious army of the Warfront, had fought many battles and wore the wounds that covered his body as proof. The newest addition to his ...

First off, I would turn this into more than one paragraph. It's kind of scary to see all of that bunched together. He saw his unfortunate childhood, his father beating ...

The others have said most of the stuff that needs to be improved, but here are a few more... And, like the tiger he was called, he was restless. He ...

I still am pretty confuzed about what happened (my brain's not working yet this morning,) but what I actually understood I really liked! There are just a few spots that ...

It also depends on what the parents had decided. In my mother's will, if she dies and my brother is 18, he gets custody of me, even though he is ...

Mars rules!!!!

Alright, I'm doing some research now. They gave us about three days to write this in school, which is why I didn't do much research. (I can't believe I'm researching-it's ...

This is a Greek myth I wrote for school, although you don't really need to know that much about the Greek gods to understand it. And as always, any title ...

Sorry. Now that it's summer time, I will be at the horse barn I work/ride at, so I won't be able to get on until Friday. (I posted on the ...

I liked it. I want to go to the beach now. :P The only thing I would suggest is to say 'who do just the same' instead of 'who just ...

Eh... not bad? XD As I said, I can't do poem reviews. So post a chapter of one of your stories and maybe my review will actually be helpful! Oh, ...

SCHOOL IS OVER! Today was my last day (a half day!) Now that school is over, I'm going to be at the horse barn I work/ride at almost everyday. Monday, ...