JFW1415

Hello! Here comes a nit-picky review! :P Even wrapped up in sheets, which I was , the confusion in the getaway driver's voice was obvious. I’d ditch this, and get ...

I live in NH and get a TON. It all melts pretty quickly; it was warm out the last two days, and the snow shrunk and pushed farther away from ...

*Jaw drops on floor* Seriously? Well, I have several... Wow, that's a lot. :shock: Well, if you critique anything of mine I will be INSANELY grateful. *Offers cookies as bribes* ...

[Holly] Holly pursed her lips slightly as she heard Aiden step onto the porch. She knew he would just ask for Briar, and she wasn’t in the mood to explain ...

I personally loved this. Although second person isn't the best, it can be done well; I've seen it before, in Mindstorms or something of the like. I don't think this ...

Thanks for the reviews! Yeah, I forgot the word 'sit.' :oops: I have a few other things I'm also going to edit, and I'll post the revised one later. :P

This is part of a collection of 100 short stories, some more like rambles. It is for a challenge on LJ that I never officially entered, since I don’t have ...

In my room, I have a big notebook that I scribble things into on random pages. (I'll often get up at midnight to do so.) The rest of the time ...

[Holly] Holly leaned back in the bench on her front porch, the intricate designs of the backboard rough through her thin shirt. Her eyes were closed, shutting out the soft ...

I've tried editing the last line; is it any better?

Thanks for the reviews! :P Lakegirls: I'll check over the other things you said, but these are just 100 short drabble type things about her for some challenge. I just ...

Thanks for the review! Yeah, I wasn't completely sure about the ending...I'll ponder on that for a bit. :P If anyone has any suggestions about the last paragraph, I'll gratefully ...

This is part of a collection of 100 short stories, some more like rambles. It is for a challenge on LJ that I never officially entered, since I don’t have ...

This is part of a collection of 100 short stories, some more like rambles. It is for a challenge on LJ that I never officially entered, since I don’t have ...

All right, I have put in my bio for Holly. Also, when does this start? Are we waiting for more characters?