JFW1415

Hello! Nit-picky part first, and then overall comments below. The numbers that follow highlighted text correspond with the numbered comments.

Eh, my review's kind of long...sorry! By the way, if they show up side by side like I'm trying to get them to (so I don't take up TOO much ...

EDIT: Just realized that the numbers came out. :( Just count the highlighted parts; the first one is one, the second is two, etc. Sorry!

I'll continue critiquing, just let me know when you get new ones up. :P Also, if it is captive/captor love, make sure it is VERY slow. That can go wrong ...

Hey, just a quick side note. When I look at a story, I first check to see how many reviews it has. If it has a bunch, I won't edit ...

Azila: Thanks for the review! I'll try not to give up... :P Urgh, I keep doing that pronoun thing. I'm fixing it in my other story, I'll try to here, ...

All right, this is the first time I'm critiquing with pictures, so let me know if this works! (It saves SO much time...) EDIT: Just realized that the numbers came ...

Thanks, everyone! I'll start doing that. :P EDIT: Aww. I just tried it, and it works, but it only gets me 30 points for a review that would normally get ...

Oh; that's a neat idea. :P I'm stealing from Cal! 8) Unless she minds... :P Can anyone explain to me how to upload multiple pictures onto one post, though? I've ...

Hello! Nit-pick to follow, overall below. I’m dying, I think . At last, I am dying. Where’s the curtain? When will the dullness of this world fold back, and when ...

Urgh; that's so annoying. :( Oh, well, I'll just keep doing what I'm doing. It just takes so much longer... ~JFW1415

Awesome! :P Um...anything of mine? :P I guess 'For Matty' or 'Reality' in Other, or 'All Eyes On Us' in Romance. :P I will love you forever and ever if ...

All right, I'm not sure if this should go here, but I couldn't find any other place...feel free to move! :P So, when I review something here, I copy and ...

All right; good luck with that. :P I like the age you chose. It does show in certain parts, but it should be clearer. If a character's age isn't clear, ...

Hello. :P Nit-picks first, overall below. A customer. I’d put ‘new’ in between. The man is rough, strong, his fingernails filthy, his eyes like stone, or iron. I also think ...