JFW1415

Eh, I don't know what you mean by your last response. You're just deleting this chapter and starting with the second, or editing it? Either way, I've already critiqued, so ...

Good luck! PM me with any questions; I know I can be kind of confusing. :P ~JFW1415

Warning: The following may be a little harsh, but there are compliments nestled in there. :P The numbers following the highlighted text correspond with the numbered comments. The answers to ...

Here you go! The promised critique. :P

Hello! The numbers next to the highlighted correspond with the numbered comments. Extra: I forgot to tell you that I think you should combine the mother's speech a bit. The ...

Same as always. :P

Hello! :P Yet another review. Same format with the numbers; you know the drill.

Yet another critique, as asked for. :P

A review, as promised. :P By the way, it is page one and two in the first column, and three and four in the second. Also (I think I left ...

NOTICE!!! I am leaving YWS for a while. Not permanently, but most likely a good chunk of time. Meaning? I won't be critiquing your stuff. If you still want one, ...

Don't revise yet! Another review on the way... :P Well, nit-picky up top, overall below. The numbers next to the highlighted correspond with the numbered comments. Also, it goes one ...

Its fine that its going to be short, but just make sure you know what your talking about (ie: where it is and when) before starting. This will alter your ...

EDIT: Eh, sorry, I forgot to add the numbers. The comments part, where it says [0] goes in order. The first one that says that is number one, the second ...

I'm baaaack! :P