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[Holly] Holly lay on her back, eyes closed, drapes closed tight. It was already nine at night, and her homework still lay on her desk, untouched. She sighed and turned ...

Krazykoreandevil: The whole leant vs. leaned thing is a British vs. American thing. I just learned this. :oops:

Play Minesweeper. Or Tetris. Or post on forums. :roll: I've always wanted to know though, is saying the word 'procrastination' a bit of an American thing? In the UK, if ...

I use track changes in Word and fix tiny parts. I usually find myself just rewriting major chunks, though, but once I've edited it several times, I only have a ...

Urgh, sorry I haven't written anything, guys! I'll get on tomorrow night (Sunday) and write something about the phone call. I've been critiquing too much... :oops: ~JFW1415

Aw, you're mean. :( You didn't allow me to have a very in-depth critique! It was too good. :P Extra: I like how you made me feel for Sarah from ...

My suggestion? Cut this into parts. People will be more likely to review that way. I will (hopefully) critique later on, but it's too late for such a long chapter. ...

One through three in first column, four and five in second. Extra: Try to read more action filled books. Learn the author's style (read more than one author's works,) and ...

One through three down first column, four and five down second.

I'd love it if you reviewd any of my work. :P All Eyes On Us needs some help... ~JFW1415

I'm not very good at reviewing children's books, so I won't be nit-picky. I do have one comment, though. I don't think you should repeat the words so often. It ...