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“Let’s put them around the room, see who finds them?” Are you sure that should be a question mark? It seems out of place, or it doesn't make much sense ...

It starts out slow, but the information on parasites throughout are really intresting, and by the end you'll want to read the sequal...which, as is the case for most things, ...

I don't blame him for being upset! “Well, we are having a baby! Isn’t that amazing! You always said you wanted a little brother or sister!” She nodded at me ...

Awwww, I didn't want Jaimy to leave!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Rob and Chris are gonna come back right??? Please!!!!! And I already don't like Nick as well. *crosses arms over chest in general

Mom had flied a court hearing to get me back I think you meant flied to be filed =D I like this chapter! Although I wish stupid Rob would stand ...

What was once wood or steel or concrete was now only a jumble of protons, neutrons and electrons, swarming into the black orifice that looked like a giants mouth. Grinding ...

Hey, welcome. Just a small suggestion, the title of your post should also be the title of your story =D Your profile also tells us you're a newbie, so that's ...

straight from 18 to 21??? ahh!!! where's 19, and 20??? =( But, on a lighter note, YAY! You're posting it again! Happiness! This was another very good peice! Your writing ...

"Matthew ", "word[comma]" "Let's go", ditto "People never lie when they say the Matthew Scrapes is always prepared", ditto again =D breathe I think here you meant breath as opposed ...

Kristie's eyes lost their dazed look, and gained a glint of steel. "I am grateful for Ray; he has shown me the evil of you, my "Sister." Because the word ...

After making sure I was tolerable, I pulled on my clothes. It was just a plain black wife beater and some baggy Bermuda shorts. This should actually be one sentence, ...

Hmm...I don't know if I agree, her friend doesn't neccesarily need a reason to go over...I mean, friends do that...but I guess reason makes people feel better. It seemed okay ...

This was MY territory, not its. Normally you have IT capatalized, to avoid having two capatalized words in one sentece, try this: This was my territory, not IT's. haha, that ...

My name’s Sarah she said could you give me a ride home I’m in no shape to drive. My mom’s going to kill me. This should be in quotation marks, ...

Let me take you to the hospital. This should either be dialogue or you just swutched to second person, eithr way, it's weird. You need to call the police. Ditto. ...